Finding Nemo. Dory's Thrilling night.
Swimming through the coral reef, her carefree spirit relaxed in the last of twilight. Her goofy eyes and wowed expression as if surprised by a new surrounding. Weaving round back and forth as if she were a fish with ADHD.
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The next day dory was hiding in and out of coral reefs trying to avoid everyone. Looking back and forth making sure no one was following her, but then BAM!!!
"We were looking for you!" exclaimed a familiar voice that Dory just could not recognize
"Why did you do that?" Questioned the smaller fish with a small right fin
"Did what? What did i do? I can't remember.... Why are you following me? Nooooo!!! Help~" cried Dory
"Dory, shush, calm down"
"How do you know my name? How long have you been stalking me? Help! Help! WooOOoooWOooo ouUUhooooo" yelped Dory
"SHHHHHhhhh, SHhhh Dory, your disturbing other people and no one speaks whale here"
"It's okay dad, no ones here, she'll stop in a minute" said the mini clown fish
Suddenly a large shadow is casted over them, The smaller fish nemo turns to take a look, eyes bulging out in horror as he sees a large purple octopus standing right behind them.
"I'm here ~" said the 8 tentacled creature with a menacing grin
And in an instant 4 of his tentacles swepted out and grabbed the father and son stalker duo
Very cute :3 I like the fact that the characters stay intact if you have watched the movie of course and it is excellent to see someone plunging into this from a creative point of view. The imagery from
ReplyDeleteQuote : "It's okay dad, no ones here, she'll stop in a minute"
Is perfect for me I can picture the scarcasm from the Mini Clown Fish ^^ Look forward to reading more keep it up!
Nice start, sounds like typical Dory. Finding Nemo is one of my favourite Pixar films.
ReplyDeleteI think that the start of the second paragraph could use some more interesting words rather than "The next day Dory..." You could try change next to something like "The following day in the colourful reefs, Dory..." or something similar to catch the attention of the audience.
looking forward to the final product!
Good start!
ReplyDeleteI loved Finding Nemo!
Also don't forget to change 'dory' to 'Dory' in the beginning of the 2nd paragraph (: